The article "Individuals in Groups" by Carol Tavris from Los Angeles Times ,1991 stated that people are different when they are alone than in a group.According to two experiments, Individual people didn't hesitate to act when there was an emergency and help people who are in need of help.In addition, the author said that people in a group became lazier by thinking that another person would take care of it.I agree with what the author said because people in a group are just lazier than by themselves.
From my personal experience, when people are in a group, they have less responsibilities, less concentrations and become lazier. For example,When I was in ESL 099 class, We were given homework to read a story for the next day's discussion. In the next day,we were separated in groups and we had to discuss the story by groups.In our groups, one of the students didn't read the story .However, the discussion was done well by other people from the group.Working in a group make people calculate and think that the job can be done by other people even though they don't give much effort.
Next, when we had to write a summary by groups, every body has different views and idea. However, we had to make an agreement what to write in our group's summary. When i had different idea with other people from the group, it really made me upset because we couldn't waste time by arguing. At that time, I just gave up my idea and let other people finish the job because whatever the result we got, it came out under the group's name. Working in a group really make me lazy and less energetic.
In conclusion, Working in a group really make people lazy and have less responsibilities and concentration because even though you work hard more than other people, the result come out under the group's name. That's why, In my point of view, working in the group make people lazy than working on their own.On the other hand, working individuals make people really work hard because they have full responsibilities and make people more intelligent.
From my personal experience, when people are in a group, they have less responsibilities, less concentrations and become lazier. For example,When I was in ESL 099 class, We were given homework to read a story for the next day's discussion. In the next day,we were separated in groups and we had to discuss the story by groups.In our groups, one of the students didn't read the story .However, the discussion was done well by other people from the group.Working in a group make people calculate and think that the job can be done by other people even though they don't give much effort.
Next, when we had to write a summary by groups, every body has different views and idea. However, we had to make an agreement what to write in our group's summary. When i had different idea with other people from the group, it really made me upset because we couldn't waste time by arguing. At that time, I just gave up my idea and let other people finish the job because whatever the result we got, it came out under the group's name. Working in a group really make me lazy and less energetic.
In conclusion, Working in a group really make people lazy and have less responsibilities and concentration because even though you work hard more than other people, the result come out under the group's name. That's why, In my point of view, working in the group make people lazy than working on their own.On the other hand, working individuals make people really work hard because they have full responsibilities and make people more intelligent.
Hi Sandar, I’m Rajiv from an ENG 220 class and I’m writing to offer you my advice on this particular writing assignment, as well as learn along the way. Thank you for allowing me this opportunity to read your work, hopefully with my input you can improve its overall quality.
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your idea about group-work making people lazier, it connects well with the experiments discussed in the passage. I really liked how you presented an example from your personal experience to support the claim. I would advise though, in your introduction, to present a clearer thesis. Agreeing with the author about a main point of the passage does not really work as your thesis statement (claim). You should always be independent and bold when stating your thesis. You should use your own words and views about the issue when writing the thesis statement. Additionally, I think you should summarize the details of the passage more thoroughly before stating the one important idea you chose. In the introduction just before you state the important idea, you should give the reader a more comprehensive analysis of the passage; it’s a key element of the assignment instruction to summarize the passage in your own words (just two-three sentences more explaining). You may want to identify some key definitions Tavris speaks about. Also, be careful with paragraph structuring. The third paragraph seems to be connected directly with the second paragraph, but is separated. You may not need to separate the two paragraphs since the personal experience is explaining one particular story. If it’s a separate or another experience then it’s applicable to have separate paragraphs. Finally, I think you can expand the conclusion just like the introduction. You did well when restating the thesis (claim) in the conclusion, but with the added contents in the intro, you can then connect Tavris’s points to your own experiences.
Thanks again for posting this. I learned a lot about the psychological effects individual vs. individual in groups has on the minds of people – it’s quite fascinating the impact of the environment has on one’s mind. Anyway, I hope my advice helps. Good luck!